Stellar: WIPpet Wednesday


I know I promised you dragons this week, but I’ve trawled back through the WIP and I can’t find anything suitable to share. Most of them contained spoilers, one piece was written in a dragon’s POV (probably not a keeper), and nothing else fired the imagination.

So instead here’s a light passage where Stellar drags an unwilling Jae along to visit the Sanctuary library. Both Jae and Stellar are in disguise, if they were recognised as travellers the best case scenario is they would be arrested. Stellar, however, doesn’t seem the slightest bit worried… In honour of the 3rd, today’s WIPpet is from page 73 of The Fall of the Kings.

“Are you the librarian?  Are you responsible for all this!” Stellar waved her arm with a big flourish and beamed down at the man, who stared at her as though she had just stepped out of one of his books.

This was Stellar being inconspicuous? She might not look much like the Stellar Jae knew; her head was bare, silvery tresses bound in a tight bun and the long shapeless dress and grey shawl made her look dowdy and harmless. But the disguise would only go so far if she kept behaving like – like Stellar.

Jae tucked her arm through Stellar’s and gave her a sharp pinch. Willing her to tone it down. All he had to do was recognise her accent or look a little closer at Jae’s colouring and it would all be over. She ducked her head and fought the urge to run a hand over her scarf to check her hair was covered.

The man staggered to his feet but his gaze didn’t leave Stellar. Jae tensed, but to her surprise the man’s shaggy grey eyebrows raised and the hostility evaporated.

“I am. Although I haven’t been able to unpack properly yet.”  He scowled at the half-empty shelves, before turning back to Stellar and showing his teeth in what appeared to be a smile.

“Well I can’t imagine what it will look like when you’ve finished. My niece has never seen a library – and I knew the Sanctuary library would be something special. What do you think Janice?” 

Janice?  Jae was more desperate than ever to get Stellar out of that library – so she could throttle her.  But under the gaze of a beaming Stellar and a man who was clearly not very interested in little Janice, Jae forced a smile and tried to look impressed.

“I’m speechless.”

If you want to join our merry band of WIPpeteers pick a passage from your WIP that has some connection to the date and join up via this linky. Many thanks to K.L. Schwengel for hosting!


20 thoughts on “Stellar: WIPpet Wednesday

  1. I have to admit I’m a little disappointed that you didn’t give us dragons (and I love the fact that you’ve written a piece from a dragon’s POV!) but you made up for it with this extract. 🙂 Great touches such as the man staring at Stellar as if she’d just stepped out of one of his books. A really vivid scene and I liked the touch of humour with it being told from Jae’s POV.

  2. No dragons?!!? *le sigh* Well, excellent writing and an engaging scene make up for it, I suppose. 😉 Although I would love to read the piece written from the dragon’s POV and see how you tackle it. I love this, “This was Stellar being inconspicuous?” Hee, hee. Good flow to the scene and nice characterization.

    1. I quite like the dragons POV it’s smack bang in the middle of the prologue, but also rife with spoilers (being from book 3). I’ll have another look and see if there’s anything I can include that won’t totally give the game away.

  3. I think it might be interesting to post WIP bits that weren’t keepers some time, and explain why. Hmm…

    Anyway, loved this! The tension is great, and I so want to slap Stellar (and I don’t even know what’s going on!)

    1. That’s a great idea… there are so many reasons why.

      Yes Stellar is a force of nature and Jae does pull her up on it later. But actually Stellar is the woman who raised Jae, and even though she drives her mad, Jae needs to show her some respect too…

    1. Stellar doesn’t (it’s always the way isn’t it). Stellar is pretty safe because she’s gone grey and doesn’t have the tell-tale colouring Jae does. And there is a reason Stellar has put them both at risk, although Jae doesn’t understand it yet.

  4. I guess Stellar will never have an acronym made of her name that includes “subtlety”. Now I’d like to know Jae’s coloring. And is Stellar silver-haired because of age (presumably, since she called Jae “niece”), or because that is her natural coloring? Is Janice Jae’s real name? Hmm…

    1. Ooo so many questions. Jae’s colouring is darker – her hair is blue black and very curly (unique to the travellers) and her eyes are dark. Stellar is older and her hair is silver by age. Years ago when she lived in Tamar she was treated terribly because of her heritage, now her fairer skin and silver hair mean she can walk freely in the city without drawing attention. When she tones it down that is.

      Part of the reason Stellar is so out there was she lost a lot in the city and has determined to live her life her way ever since. And subtlety is nowhere in her name…

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